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lost memories - kuponut - Fri Nov 18 2005
this is a poem about the main character in hitokiri mech:surith
what was that thought?
i thought i thought?
though my thoughts are gone.
i still remember the thought.
but i cant reach it.
what happened to my family?
what do you look like mom?
what do you look like dad?
little,big,brother,sister i might have had?
why am i cursed with this.
this thing on my arm?
my past life is shrouded in mist.
i cant remember anything
but i know what i have gained.
sucks,yeah i know but i got really bored in here(im in my mom's classroom)
RE: lost memories - SimsHsia - Fri Nov 18 2005
Well, the rhyming scheme is alright; some punctuation is needed, however the poem is alright.
RE: lost memories - Toriban - Sat Nov 19 2005
Classroom? Is she teacher or student?
RE: lost memories - kuponut - Tue Nov 22 2005
(Sat Nov 19 2005, 02:13 AM)Toriban Wrote: Classroom? Is she teacher or student?
teacher