lost memories
#1
this is a poem about the main character in hitokiri mech:surith

what was that thought?
i thought i thought?
though my thoughts are gone.
i still remember the thought.
but i cant reach it.
what happened to my family?
what do you look like mom?
what do you look like dad?
little,big,brother,sister i might have had?
why am i cursed with this.
this thing on my arm?
my past life is shrouded in mist.
i cant remember anything
but i know what i have gained.

sucks,yeah i know but i got really bored in here(im in my mom's classroom)
Skin wrapped around bone and soul
#2
Well, the rhyming scheme is alright; some punctuation is needed, however the poem is alright.
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#3
Classroom? Is she teacher or student?
Of A Revolution Wrote:And we would sit, and wonder about the future,
But now I'm thinkin' that today sounds fine to me.


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#4
(Sat Nov 19 2005, 02:13 AM)Toriban Wrote: Classroom? Is she teacher or student?

teacher
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